Application: Drak Avatar of Spring

[Yami Xin-Jing]

Name: Yami Xin-Jing or Yami.
The name means
"Yami" (japanese) = "darkness",
"Xin Jing" (chinese) = "crystal heart"
Age: 615 years
Physical description: Yami is a dark silver kitsune with lighter tailtips. She has got a orange and purple stripe over each cheek, from the corner of the eye down to her neck. She stands tall and majestetic, and other kitsunes often mistake her for a male. She has got a set of emerald green eyes and her socks are dust mule. She has got six tails and in one of her big ears a part is missing.

Personality: Xin Jing enjoys to play tricks on other ferals, but most often remain serious. Some thinks she is arrogant, but she sees herself noble.

Powers: Having the element of fire, Yami can produce orbs of light or/and fire and keep them soaring around her in mid-air. She is also able to produce bigger fireballs to throw at enemies.
Yami avoids physical battles.

Personal belongings: A silver chain hanging around her neck, holding a purple orb in place is a memory of her beloved mother.
She's got two golden rings in her left ear and one in her right.

History: Yami Xin-Jing was born on the first blooming day of the year. The sun had just went up, causing the dewy forest to glimmer. She was alone in her litter, and her mother Aisu Uindo brought her up lovingly.
One night when Yami was one year old, thunder raged in the shy. Her mother did not make it back home to the den the following morning. Understanding that somthing was wrong, Yami started looking. The only thing she could find was her mother's silver chain. Yami grieved for her mother, and the reason for her disappearing was never understood.
At the age of three, Yami fully-grown left her mother's old den to wander the earth on her own. She has never known her father.
Wherever the young kitsune went, she wasn't welcome. Nobody dared to trust her, and they all disliked her habit of playing nasty tricks on those she did not like. She changed homeland many times, always ending the same way - she was molested and kicked out by the other inhabitants. Yami's frustration started to grow and her loving nature seemed to be gone.
One of the kitsunes scratched her right ear so bad that it was never able to heal.
Yami Xin-Jing firstly approached the calm Dapplewood when she had reached the age of 597, and she has lived there ever since. She spends her nights in a well-hidden den. Ashamed of addmitting it, she feels quite lonely and wishes to make a friend. But she has difficulty in trusting others.

Sample RP
Xin Jing lied slumbering in the low grass. She slept, but not so deeply that she did not notice the sounds outside the den. Irritated, she flicked an ear, angrily wishing that the birds would start singing later in the morning. Seeing that she had no choice but to rise, since she was already awake, Yami rose from her patch of flattened grass and stretched her body. She blinked hard a couple of times, violently shaking her tails as if to wake them up as well. Then she opened her mouth and emitted a yawn. She then looked around the den, placing herself on a murky stump.
Yami Xin-Jing: …
Yami Xin-Jing made several attempts to blink the tiredness away, and soon she felt very much awake. She shook her head, causing the silver chain around her neck to rattle. Feeling that it was time for breakfast, Yami left the small den to hunt.

[Foxfairy]

Your style is unique and interesting; it fits the mythological setting of your character's environment and mindset well. There are a few small tense, punctuation and other gramattical errors, but they could easily be improved by a looking over the post before posting.

[Yami Xin-Jing]

Thank you.
So - er, should I repost it?

[Foxfairy]

It's something to work on when you're actually roleplaying.

Longer critique and examination later. Sleep now.

[Mengsel]

Eh, it's only 9:30. I should be memorizing this poem I told myself I'd memorize for extra credit, but.. xD Whatever.
The Good:
~Basically what Spring has already said - You seem to know your basic kitsune facts, and there's no majorly crazy stuff like the ability to make the entire world explode.

The Bad:
~Typos
"Application: Drak Avatar of Spring" - 'Dark'
"She has got a orange" -- 'an orange'
"thunder raged in the shy." -- Should be 'sky'
~Grammar in some areas
"At the age of three, Yami fully-grown left her mother's old den" -- Odd sentence structure, should be something more like "Fully grown, at the age of three.." or with the 'fully grown' omitted altogether.
~Fragments
"But she has difficulty in trusting others." -- Should be combined with the previous sentence with a comma
~Tenses/reiteration
"Xin Jing lied slumbering in the low grass." -- Should be 'lay slumbering'
"She slept, but not so deeply that she did not notice the sounds outside the den." -- The fact she was sleeping had already been stated in the sentence before this one.

"Xin Jing enjoys to play tricks on other ferals, but most often remain serious. Some thinks she is arrogant, but she sees herself noble." -- Irregular tense switches here, and nouns not agreeing with verbs... 'Xin Jin enjoys playing tricks on other ferals, but most often remains serious. Some think she is arrogant, but she sees herself as noble."

Overall:
~Re-read your posts before you hit enter, just to make sure that you haven't misspelled anything and that all your sentences make sense. I think that would cause a drastic improvement, and since you don't have that much farther to go, that'd be excellent. You're almost there, just work on it a bit during actual roleplay, as Dapp has said. Please feel free to come in and roleplay with whoever's around whenever you get the chance; I think I speak for everyone when I say we'd all love to see you flourish.

...And now, Thanatopsis. "To him who in the love of nature holds/Communion with her visible forms..."